Thank Youuuuuuuuuu Boy/Gal
when i see sea, i see some
when some see sea
they dont see what in sea
Hi,
it's my first poem and I know that it's terrible, so plz don't make fun of me
all the comments are welcomed
and here's my so-called poem
Ultimate love
Don't cry to me baby, dear
I can't see your world to be full of tear,
What made your world to be so cloudy here?
The earth isn't as small as it is seemed here,
But you can't run away and be where that you want to be there,
You've got to try to bring heaven right here
But it can't come true, unless you find your rescuer
Who's the one for you dear?
Don't be hurry for finding him/her?
Be patient so you can find your ultimate love for ever
there is no one to die for
my heart is too tired to beat
people don't believe in me
so what can I say? oh sh i t
Dude, you're hell of a poet
I've corrected your mistakes
thx buddy
but you changed the rhythm
but i think.. this is better
let me sing another one
If by rhythm you mean rhyme، I have to notice that there were no perfect rhymes too
it & me ... beat & s--t
I wait eagerly
can't see the future
sounds surround me again
need a great hope to jump here
Otherwise I'll fall in death and fear